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Old 05-05-2020, 11:06 PM   #99
TedG
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Originally Posted by bigbassloyd View Post
I like informative descriptions. I'm not a fan of flowery BS enhancement though.

"On a beautiful golden Spring morning, Three powerful General Electric diesel locomotives struggle mightily on a black ribbon of loaded CSX coal hoppers high on an ancient mountain of the Appalachian range near the small hamlet of Tuckahoe, West Virginia.

Loyd L.
Not bad. But you need some more weather references. Maybe add "the dark clouds of a threatening thunderstorm on the horizon" or describe just how unusually hot/cold it was.
/Ted
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